Matt Bellamy

Hello! This piece has potential. I think it's really good that you wrote it in present tense because it makes the reader feel more like they're really there. In the ...

Hi there! I like this, but I think it suffers from a lack of punctuation. Commas help readers read your work and allow them to take pauses, and I think ...

Hi! This is very interesting. I like how you detail all the things that the picture reminds you of. I'd like to see more of an explanation of why you ...

This is light-hearted and cute. What I particularly like about it is that it is a good haiku in the sense that it takes a moment in time, a scene, ...

Hi! I like that you created a sort of metaphor here, but I think it could be better. I mean, what if you didn't say religion at all? It's just ...

Hi Biffle! I like this. You use very good description. However, the -- at the end of every line were a bit off-putting. I think there might be some instances ...

Hi! I like your rhetorical questions in this poem, and the emotion in it. However I have a couple of suggestions - firstly, try splitting it up into seperate stanzas, ...

Hello! This is interesting. There are bits I like and bits I don't, so let's have a look. Golden locks A little cliché. Grass green eyes, Better, more original. A ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS. Don't forget to review other people's work, and then you'll get more reviews too. :) I quite like these, particularly the first poem. It reminds me ...

Hi! I like this but I have a few suggestions for re-wording. "I don’t know why The reason why it rains" I don't think you need to say why twice ...

Hi! I really like this - it's very well written, good description, and it flowed very well. It also rhymed well and wasn't forced at all. Again and wind don't ...

Hi! I felt kind of bad for you because you don't have any reviews on this but I think it's mainly because it's so long. I would suggest maybe splitting ...

Hey Ben! Sorta disagree that Britain makes the best comedies, I'm partial to a good American sitcom myself. ;) I think you should get rid of the ellipse at the ...

This is really good. I'm not sure what relevance the first stanza has to the rest of the poem, though. I love the third stanza - it's so innocent and ...

Critiquing lyrics is hard! I don't find this particularly original. It is relatable, which is what I look for in a song, but I think you could say what you ...